Thursday, October 05, 2006

Introducing Maria by Amy


I walked up the steps to the cottage and knocked on the door. The door just creaked open into a dark, spooky room. There was a seat by a table in the kitchen. I sat down and a lady sat down on the other chair on the other side of the table. As she sat down the chair sank. She was a very small lady and by the sinking I thought she was very heavy for a lady her size. She looked at me with her tiny little eyes as she sat there staring. Her nose had 5 big warts and it almost made me sick. I thought she was a mean looking lady.
“Have you come for me to help you find that lost puppy that got lost 2 weeks ago?” the lady asked me in a hint of a foreign accent.
She was a very pleasant lady.
“How did you know I was looking for Lucky?” I said curiously.
“I read the newspaper. I read about all the mystery disappearances that happen” she said
“I am called Maria Parker but my nickname is Mari Parker" she said breathless.
“It is a pleasure to meet you, Maria” I said happily.
Then Maria got up and left the table. She came back 5 seconds later dressed in a dress, a silk scarf round her shoulders and a scarf on her head.
“How do I look?” Maria asked.
“You look....lovely!” I said unsure.
“Thanks! Now I will find your dog!” Maria said.
“How are you going to find Lucky when all the detectives failed?
“I have a strange gift. I have a second sight. And I shall give it to you” Maria told her.
“I see him, now I can go and find Lucky, thanks Maria” I yelled as I ran out the door.
“Goodbye” Maria shouted.

6 Comments:

At 4:44 AM, Blogger St Flannan's said...

star:I like the part the door creaked open it made the character seem mysterious.

star:I also liked the way you described the door creeping open

wish:The sentnces could be shorter.

 
At 4:44 AM, Blogger St Flannan's said...

star:I like the part the door creaked open it made the character seem mysterious.

star:I also liked the way you described the door creeping open

wish:The sentnces could be shorter.

 
At 4:44 AM, Blogger St Flannan's said...

star:I like the part the door creaked open it made the character seem mysterious.

star:I also liked the way you described the door creeping open

wish:The sentnces could be shorter.

 
At 6:30 AM, Blogger Killermont Primary School Writing Projects said...

Thank you for your comment. I think i should make my sentances shorter sometimes

 
At 6:30 AM, Blogger Killermont Primary School Writing Projects said...

Thank you for your comment. I think i should make my sentances shorter sometimes

 
At 6:30 AM, Blogger Killermont Primary School Writing Projects said...

Thank you for your comment. I think i should make my sentances shorter sometimes

 

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