Outside my Window by Laura
Snow is falling,
Past my window.
Rain is bashing,
Against my roof.
Wind is blowing,
Brings a tear to my eye.
Snowman is out there,
He is drooping.
His arms are melting,
It’s the end for him.
Listen
posted by Killermont Primary School Writing Projects @ 6:20 AM
4 comments
4 Comments:
star good use of snow, rain, and wind
star good discription for the snowman dieing
wish you could have biger amounts of words on lines
STAR i liked it when you said rain is bashing againest my roof.
STAR good discripyion
WISH improve your writing i mean exstend your writing plz
Thanks for your useful comments next time I write a poem I will have that in mind
Your wish is a bit unclear could you please make yourself a bit clearer
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